Hi, SEers. You’re with Mae today for a look at writing action scenes. Of all the types of scenes that go into constructing a novel, I used to dread action the most. Not so much these days, but they’re still the scenes I tweak and re-tweak most during editing.
When writing an action scene, there are a few tips to keep in mind:
Use Short Sentences
Short sentences generally work best in action scenes. Keep your reader pumped up and immersed in the moment. Don’t leave them stumbling over a tangle of lengthy sentences. Intersperse longer sentences with dialogue and/or shorter sentences to propel the action forward.
Avoid Weak Verbs
Actions scenes call for strong verbs. Avoid verbs that are overused (turned, pulled, looked, moved). A trick I use when I write action is to focus on the urgency of the moment. As an example, people don’t just turn or move when they’re frightened or in a dangerous situation. Characters shouldn’t either. They’re more likely to pivot, wheel, bolt, barrel, etc. You get the idea.
Introspection
If you use introspection, keep it short. It goes without saying, this isn’t the time for your character to wax poetic. 😊
Use Emotion
At the same time, use your character’s emotions to snag your reader by showing what they’re feeling.
Brevity
In real life, action happens quickly. Whether a fist fight, a car chase, someone fleeing a fire—it all happens fast. When writing, authors need to assist their readers in seeing the moment, but we don’t need to highlight every grunt, blow-by-blow, or skidding shriek of a tire. Use enough to get your reader’s adrenaline pumping, but be careful not to overdo.
Watch for Echoes
Word echoes creep up in prose, but are often more likely to appear in action scenes. Here’s a trick—write through the scene with common verbs and let your echoes happen. Then go back and tweak to cut echoes and swap out weak verbs with power verbs.
The Overview:
THE GOOD
Action scenes are a great way to grab your reader and get their adrenaline pumping. It keeps them engaged and actively flipping pages. End a scene or chapter on a hook, and they’re going to read ahead.
THE BAD
Remember that action happens quickly and shouldn’t drag on for pages. If you’ve got a car crash followed by someone running, being caught, and then engaging in a fist fight, that spans several action sequences. Of course it’s going to carry on for a pages, but be careful when relaying a single event.
THE UGLY
Nothing kills an action sequence quicker than telling your reader what is taking place. No one wants to read a flat action scene. Be sure to let your reader hear, feel, and see the earthquake, the rampaging dinosaur, the near escape through a night-blackened forest, or the blast from a stun gun.
THE TAKEAWAY
Urgency. Whatever is taking place, if you keep a sense of urgency in mind and propel your scene with power verbs, the action will leap from the page.
As writers, we all approach our work differently. I still get flummoxed when I have to write an action scene, but I’m now past the point of fleeing-in-terror-avoidance. Keeping a sense of urgency in mind is a huge help when it comes time to fleshing out the scene.
What about you? If you have any tips for action scenes, I’d love to hear them in the comments. How do you feel about writing action? Love? Hate? Tolerate? Stay a spell, and share your thoughts.
Ready, set, go!
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great tips! very helpful for anyone looking to improve his writing, thank you very much for sharing☺️
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Thanks for checking out the post. I’m glad you found it helpful!
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some great tips here to spice up my action scenes, thank you!
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That’s fantastic to hear. Thanks for checking them out!
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Thanks for sharing such practical advice. These tips can surly implemented. I agrees with your advice and first point that you have mentioned “Short sentences”
Short and clear sentences keeps our audience active. Lengthy writing style lead to a passive reading.
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Hi, Ann. Thanks for dropping by, reading and commenting. Yes,short sentences work best for writing action scenes. They help with urgency and propelling hte action forward. I’m glad you found my post informative!
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I have just written about a car crash in my latest book. Having read this, I have editing to do! Thanks so much, your advice is excellent.
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Hi, Beth. I’m so glad you found the post helpful, and that it was timely for you. Thanks so much for letting me know!
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This is some really great advice! I love the practicality you have so that I can truly implement this in my writing!
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Hi, Rachel.That is awesome to hear! I am so glad you found the post helpful and will be able to employ it in your writing.
Thanks for visiting and commenting!
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All great tips and not much I’d presume to add, really. There’s always the dilemma of whether to apply slow build-up of tension or sudden shock, though its fun to play with both…
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I do love both kinds, Frederick. Both as a writer and a reader. My current WIP is more of that slow-build tension.
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I love these tips, Mae! I often tell my students to look for these things when they are trying to identify suspense. 🙂
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Awesome to hear, Yvette! I know they always make a huge difference for me. I think you’re providing excellent advice for your students!
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These are excellent tips, Mae! It made me think of an action scene in a movie. There is no time for tons of dialogue – just movement. Great post!
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Thank you, Jan. I love the comparison, and am so glad you enjoyed the post!
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Reblogged this on Archer's Aim and commented:
Action scenes from a pro. Read how Mae Clair writes them over on Story Empire.
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Aww, thanks, P.H. Compliment and reblog much appreciated!
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You’re welcome. Those were excellent tips to remember.
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This is a great post with useful tips. I agree with you on verb usage. It applies to any genre. Precise verbs show a lot of actions and movements without long descriptions.
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That’s a great way of phrasing it, Miriam. They do exactly that. Power verbs have such a way of dropping a reader in a scene.
Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts!
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You’re welcome, Mae. Thank you for the post!
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Great info on writing action scenes, Mae.
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Thanks, Flossie. I’m glad you found the post informative. Thanks for reading and commenting!
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Terrific advice for this memoirist, too! Thank you.
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I’m glad you found it helpful. Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
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Excellent recap on the elements of writing action. 🙂
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Thank you, Diana. I’m glad you enjoyed the post.
I always love the action scenes in your novels! 🙂
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🙂 I try.
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Great advice. I like writing action scenes and love battles in urban fantasy, but they do take more thought than some things I write. I try to think of something that’s unexpected, something that surprises the reader (like your scene with the poor guy walking through the alley in Eventide) and of course, it can’t be too easy for the protagonist to win or there’s no tension.
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I always enjoy your battle/supernatural confrontations in Muddy River. Tension is absolutely paramount. Sometimes I love a slow, creeping build to the moment of action. That’s what I wanted to do in Eventide. I’m not in love with writing action scenes, and not sure I ever will be, but they have gotten considerably easier to approach over time.
I’m glad you enjoyed the post, Judi!
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Reblogged this on Judi Lynn and commented:
Great advice for writing action scenes from Mae Clair.
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Awesome! Thank you for the share, Judi!
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Great tips, Mae! Saving and sharing… Thanks.
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Thanks so much, Bette. I’m glad you found the post helpful!
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I have also always dreaded action scenes! I often don’t get to write them, as my genre of choice is typically literary fiction. But I marvel at those who can flawlessly execute an action scene and keep me on the edge of my seat. I have such a fascination for it that I often try to study it and implement some of the patterns I see when writing dramatic scenes. I’m curious what your opinion is on paragraph length for action scenes? – Great post!
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Hello, and thanks so much for stopping by to comment! Literary fiction is it’s own beast–I’m a huge fan–but some rules still apply. For action, I definitely favor shorter paragraphs and scenes which propels the action(s) forward. It keeps that sense of urgency and momentum. When it comes to literary fiction, however, I have a different view. I like to sink into the scene and wallow around in the prose. That’s when I want detail and complete immersion.
Thank you so much for visiting and happy writing!
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Excellent advice, Mae. Thank you so much!
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I’m so glad you enjoyed the post, Gwen. Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
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Excellent advice Mae. I just finished reading the action scene between the Ghoul and Dante in Eventide. It was the best.
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Wow! I’m honored, John. Thank you! It’s good to know my action scenes actually work.
Thank you! 🙂
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Great tips, Mae. That one about ‘introspection’ can’t be said often enough. How many great action scenes have been ruined when the MC decided to mull over a connection to his childhood.
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Absolutely! I remember trying to read a NYT bestseller–twice!–and that was the problem I had. As soon as the action started, the author took me out of the scene by having the MC think back to an experience in his childhood. Huh? I forgave it once, but when it became a pattern, I stopped reading a few chapters in.
Thanks, Jacqui!
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I like the word urgency when writing the action. I have fun with the action parts, and have been known to scare myself ay times…lol. Its hard not to put all the small details in there, I agree and remember to enact the senses. Great post, Mae!
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Urgency is the word that really works for me when I’m writing action, Denise. And using the senses is a great way to engage the reader.
I admit I’ve creeped myself out a few times when writing particular scenes. It’s so easy to get thoroughly engrossed in what we’re writing and sink into the scene.
I’m glad you enjoyed the post!
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Reblogged this on Jacquie Biggar-USA Today Best-selling author and commented:
Excellent advice at Story Empire from Mae Clair on the art of #writing action scenes.
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Thanks for sharing, Jacquie! Much appreciated!
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This is a helpful post, Mae. I tend to race through my action scenes as my adrenaline gets pumping, lol. I like the part about showing only enough to paint the scene- don’t overdo the drama. Saving this to Pinterest for reference.
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Awesome! Thank you! I’m glad you found it helpful.
I usually race through my action scenes too, caught in the moment of what’s happening on the page. But then I have to go back and edit, re-edit, re-edit and re-dit to the nth degree until I get the flow and word choices just right. I’m getting better at them the more I do them. I remember the day when writing an action scene would send me fleeing in terror, LOL!
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Want to improve the action scenes in your writing? Mae Clair has some fantastic (and easily understood) tips on Story Empire today. Check out her great post, and then pass it along so others can enjoy it, too! Thanks, and thanks to Mae for sharing these terrific and helpful pointers! 🙂 ❤
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Thanks for sharing the post, Marcia. Much appreciated! 🙂
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Very happy to share such a useful post, Mae! I hope it gets passed on far and wide, too! 🙂
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Super post, Mae, with some very helpful tips. I don’t write a lot of action scenes that require physical fighting, and so far, no actual battles, but some of the dramatic scenes in my story could be considered action scenes of a type, I think. At any rate, I know I can make use of these tips as I go forward. Great post! And as soon as I saw the T-Rex in the car mirror, I thought of Jeff Goldblum’s iconic line in Jurassic Park. “Just because you can do something doesn’t mean you should!” It’s a saying I’ve lived by ever since that movie came out 27 years ago! 😀 Sharing this, for sure! 🙂
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Thanks, Marcia! Glad you liked my tips. Action is probably the most difficult type of scene to write, but even other types of scenes can benefit from some of these tips, such as dramatic scenes. That’s a great example. The action might not be physical, but there’s still plenty of it going on.
And when I saw the T-Rex photo, I immediately thought of Jurassic Park. I had forgotten the line you mentioned, but that is a great one to live by!
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This is useful information, Mae. I assume an echo is repetition of action in the same scene.
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Hi, Robbie. I was actually referring to word repetition echos. They’re easy to overlook in any scene but especially in action scenes.
I’m so glad you found the post helpful!
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Ok, thanks Mae. I think I avoid word echoes but I do sometimes repeat the idea and have to remove the second one.
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Some great points! Action scenes are hard for me to write. And big battle scenes are hard for me to follow when I’m reading them. I particularly like the recommendation of short sentences.
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I think most writers find action scenes difficult, Tessa. Over time I’ve become more comfortable with them, but they’re still the scenes I tweak and retweak to the nth degree. I think the more you write them the easier they become.
I sometimes get confused with action scenes when I’m reading, especially if it involves a sprawling event like a battle. That’s when the author has to work extra hard to keep everything concise but still brimming with urgency.
I’m glad you enjoyed the post!
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Great post today, Mae. I think I spend more time on my action scenes than the rest of my work because they stress me out. Not sure if that’s because I’m channeling my characters or because I worry about getting them right. In any event, this post is an excellent tutorial on how to craft high action (and how not to). Great job.
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Thanks, Staci. I spend the most time on my action scenes, too. I worry about if I over do them, or don’t provide enough detail. It’s a delicate balance but I’m getting better at finding my comfort zone. I think the more I write them, the less intimated I am by them. They always seem to require more work than the rest of my writing, but I’m better prepared in approaching them now.
Glad you found the post useful!
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Loved this. Short and snappy with a hook. Offer the bait and allow the reader to imagine the rest. Thanks so much, I’ll look forward to learning more from you.
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Hi, Beth. It’s wonderful to have you drop by and comment. I’m so glad you found the post useful! It’s our aim to share and offer helpful posts on Story Empire. Thank you for visiting and I wish you happy writing!
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Thank you, Mae, your advice came at an apposite point during my writing schedule. Much appreciated!
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Interesting tips. I’m trying to figure out if I follow or go against these when I write. I use long sentences and draw action scenes out for chapter sections with a lot of back and forth. It’s fight and chase scenes mostly because those aren’t really fast in terms of time. Fast paced, but it can go for awhile especially if you’re making sure to hit multiple senses.
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I think it comes down to the type of action and also author style. In fantasy especially,there is so much more to describe, and often times the clashes are on a much larger scale. Fast paced definitely, and hitting multiple senses is great. I try to do the same!
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I love writing action scenes, but some of mine are kind of flat. Fortunately, I have a great critique group that improves them dramatically. I should pin this post to my work space somewhere. Great tips today.
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I’m glad you found the tips helpful, Craig. Working with a critique group is a great way to get feedback on what works and what doesn’t. I do the same thing!
I also think the more you write action scenes the easier it is to approach them. It’s like with any writing skill—the more we flex that particular muscle the more toned it becomes!
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Good way of stating it.
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Good tips for all authors. I love some of the alternative words suggested.
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Thanks so much for the reblog, Sara. I’m glad you enjoyed the post!
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I agree with all the points you’ve made, and I echo what Joan says above … short chapters also add to the pace and tension. I love writing action scenes. Great post, Mae, and thanks for sharing. I love the picture with the dinosaur in the wing mirror!
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Harmony, good for you that you actually LIKE writing action scenes. Most writers are know put them at the bottom of their writing list,
Over time, I’ve developed a greater affinity for them, but they are still the scenes I struggle with the most.
I agree that short chapters are a huge plus, too. I easily devour books like that.
The dinosaur photo reminded me of Jurassic Park. I actually found it on Pixabay. Click on the photo and it links back! 🙂
Thank you also for the reblog!
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Great post today. I agree with what you’ve said, especially using power verbs and keeping the scenes and sentences short. I tend to write shorter chapters toward the end of my books because that’s usually where a lot of action (solving the mystery) occurs.
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Short chapters are another great way of propelling action forward, Joan. Excellent point.
My scenes tend to grow shorter as well, when everything starts layering together with the pieces falling into place and there’s a rush to finish.
Isn’t it amazing? Sometimes that kind of writing can make you feel like you’re flying! 🙂
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I often end up with shorter chapters toward the end. Makes for quick pacing.
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Absolutely! Mine definitely pick up toward the end, as well as my scenes.
So great to have you drop by and check out the post!
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