Hi, Gang, Craig here again. I may make this a sporadic series, and I welcome my Story Empire compatriots to steal it and use it any time they like. We talk about all kinds of things here, always with a positive shiny face on it. That ends today.
Today, we’re going to break things. Honestly, we see all kinds of posts about good things to do, helpful tips, and downright cheerleading. We also need to know what to avoid, and the topic today is passive characters.
Main characters have to drive the story. They have to take actions to solve whatever the main issue is. I’ve mentioned before that I keep living documents with pointers and tips. One I saved years ago is from the Pixar recipe book: Readers will appreciate the character more for trying than succeeding.
That’s a powerful thought. Trying must be pretty important in the scheme of things. Let’s make up some examples,starting with your own personal Game of Thrones.
Your main character is convicted of a crime he did not commit. He’s been sent to the wall in the north to join the Night’s Watch. He’s facing a life of celibacy, servitude, and an important job… watching.
How do you see this playing out? Chapter One, vows and settling in. Chapter Two, touring the wall. Chapter Three watching. 4, watching, 5 more watching… 6 thought I saw something, turned out to be a fox…
Think of the princess, locked in her tower… waiting for someone to rescue her. Dear diary, made friends with mice…
Don’t laugh, I’ve done this. My guy lost two family members, one to a cannibalistic alien. He’s depressed, and his world is spinning out of control. Friends and family make recommendations, so he takes them. He’s not in charge, and he’s not acting to solve the main issue. He ultimately settles up with the killers, but it takes a dozen or more chapters to get there. How many readers stuck it out to get to the place where something happened? Answer: Not many.
Give a thought to these words: hiding, avoiding, guarding, watching, protecting. If this is the main goal of your character, perhaps you should rethink some of your story. We have a comment section to add some other words, or share you own foibles.
Passive characters have a place in stories, but not as main characters. Think about Indiana Jones. There was a secret society that protected the resting place of the Arc of the Covenant. They were interesting, but weren’t the main character. Sir Richard protected the Holy Grail, but nobody is rushing to tell his story.
There is a cure, and it involves a bit of backbone. Change hiding and avoiding to aggression. Maybe build an IED to blow up the aliens. Doesn’t have to work, but your character is trying.
Someone is probably going to weigh in with some good story that contradicts what I’m saying here. I doubt that it does. Think about Misery. The author guy is injured and trapped. He takes to re-writing his novel to distract the crazy lady, hopefully giving him a chance to escape somehow. It isn’t much, but he’s trying. Play off Stockholm Syndrome, but make sure he does something.
How about it, gang? What do you think about passive characters? Are you interested in more posts like this? I love the comments section, so let me hear from you.
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I’m currently rewriting my second novel because of this. I wrote nearly 70K words before realizing that my MC had no agency and was just reacting to things happening to her rather than actually doing things herself 😂 Live and learn, I guess. She’s kicking some ass right now.
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I’ve done it, and I’m doing it again. This one is a child for part of the story, and has to go along with some things. I need to make her more of a rebel on the second pass. She isn’t in charge, but can still show some moxie during that phase.
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I find I run into this more often when I’m “pantsing” my draft rather than using an outline (something I’m trying to force myself to use). Exploratory writing inevitably leads to my character wandering around aimlessly while I, as the writer, figure out what’s going on. Then the second pass involves cutting a bunch of secondary characters who were stealing the limelight and giving their job to my MC.
Interesting that you mentioned Misery. I’ve never been able to finish that book and I wonder if that’s why?
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I’m at my best when my storyboard is fully fleshed out. I do a lot of pantsing between the index cards though, and you are exactly right. This is where more reaction than action happens.
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I’m trying to reserve those pantsing urges for my flash fiction and to be more purposeful/structured with my longer forms. I have resisted for many years! But there is hope for me, I think. I’m following now, so maybe I’ll learn some of your tricks. This was a great article!
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That’s generally what I do. I don’t outline though. I storyboard. Sometimes it’s hard to resist starting before the board is complete.
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I have never tried storyboarding! I picture something like the storyboards I’ve seen used in film with the scenes literally drawn out. I always assumed that was for screenwriters and the like. Guess I need to dig into that one and see if it might work better for me! I definitely fight with myself to resist starting writing too soon. New stories are so exciting!
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That’s how they work. Spell out acts using columns, key events at the end of acts, etc. Plus the electronic ones let me pin graphics and checklists to them.
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Interesting! Do you have an article/blog post about storyboarding anywhere? That sounds like something I might be able to adapt to.
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I posted a couple things on Story Empire, and on my own blog. Let me see if WordPress will let me post some links.
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Thanks! If not I can do a search once I’m on my computer 🙂
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This one too https://storyempire.com/2018/04/16/a-friendlier-way-of-outlining/
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This one is awesome! Thanks 🙂
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Let me know if some of this works for you.
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Try this one https://storyempire.com/2018/12/14/and-now-for-something-completely-different/
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Reblogged this on Archer's Aim and commented:
Craig Boyack jolts everyone with this tip – break things on Story Empire! It’s a great tip but no cheerleading on this one…
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Ha ha, thanks.
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You’re welcome!
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I had a an idea that I loved but the problem was exactly what you just wrote. The protagonist was passive. No matter how hard I tried he was who he was. Because of the idea of the novel I refused to let it go. I mentally placed it on the shelf and waited until something in my mind clicked.
When that click happened it became an easy fix. I felt bad for letting him go. He was a nice guy but to nice and to boring for anyone to read Sometimes we have to kill our darlings and replace them with an action-packed darling.
Fun stuff, my friend. You always have great topics.
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Thanks, Bryan. I’m dealing with some of that now. My character grows up to be an ass-kicker, but not when she’s eleven.
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You’re right. Passive characters may have their place in a story, but not as main characters. Sometimes mine might pause, reflect, even second guess themselves, but they take action.
Great post, Craig.
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Thanks, Joan.
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Great post, Craig! I tried a passive protagonist once but it didn’t get off the ground, got too bored, lol.
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That’s a great point. If the author feels bored, the audience will too.
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Passive characters are the worst. They bore me to death. Excellent advice, Craig.
When all else fails, bring in a guy with a gun. <- I forget who said that. Stephen King?
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That’s what the thriller and mystery folks do. Thanks, Sue.
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Reblogged this on Ted Myers and commented:
Some valuable writing insights from author C.S. Boyack.
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Excellent advice. Excellent post! Reblogging!
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Thank you, and thanks for sharing.
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You make a valid point! I prefer a character to actively be doing something to change their situation. Sometimes you might have one passive character you need to move the story along. I enjoyed your post and talking about what not to do:)
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Thank you. All of them will have a crisis of confidence at some point, but the protag has to take the next step.
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Action is where it’s at! Great reminder, Craig.
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Thank you, Bette.
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Reblogged this on heroicallybadwriter and commented:
Here are some very interesting ideas and opinions on the passive (or minor) characters. Well worth a read
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A very thought provoking post. The passive (or minor) characters are often the oil which keep the machine of the narrative moving along.
Since I’m writing fantasy with a great deal of action and unusual events no one gets a chance to be very passive. More a case of folk saying things along the lines of
‘What the —–!’,
‘Thank you for saving/helping me’
‘What’s it got to do with you anyway?’
‘I know you’re up to something!’
‘Let me explain things to you,’
‘Were you looking for this?’
‘Works for me’
‘Hah! Foolish mortal,’ (not that literally I assure you)
or
‘Urk!’ (before expiring)
They do help the narrative all the same.
This has to be reblogged.
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Appreciate the reblog. Those secondary characters can get away with a lot more. The lead has to take effort to cure the problem.
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How very true!
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I think there is a balance between a character being active and passive. All passive is BORING! All active is tiring. If a character doesn’t do anything, he or she doesn’t belong in a story. Put them in a retirement home. 🙂 Great post, Craig!
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Thank you, Jan.
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Great post. I’ve only finished one book. (I call it “The Novel I Learned To Write A Novel On.”) My critique partners sometimes referred to my protagonist as passive. Thank goodness! The story is character driven (I’m an inveterate pantser.), so the main character had to get moving. A few teaks (excising the first 19 chapters) and voila(!) the book worked. I always enjoy your posts.
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I love that. All of us should have a novel we learned to write a novel on. I have two.
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This is good, Craig. It made me think (always a scary prospect, lol). I use sarcasm and humor as tools to push my characters through the watching, watching scenes, as you put it. Dialogue can help to switch from passive/slow reading to something much more engaging.
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Thanks. Dialog is a great tool, but eventually they have to stop watching and start acting. Under modern sensibilities it had better happen fast too.
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Last week, I did a DNF on a book because I was six chapters into it and the MC was just–meh. Sad part is, I was REALLY looking forward to the story. What a let down. I don’t need characters to be constantly reacting (I like introspection too), but I do want to connect with them. That’s almost impossible to do if they are passive.
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Good comment, and it proves my point.
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My main characters have periods of reflection or indecision, but in general, they are action-driven. I think I’d go nuts writing a passive hero, let alone trying to read one. Thought-provoking stuff, Craig. (And no, I could not think of an example of a passive hero.)
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That could be because the passive ones don’t get famous. They orbit around the slush pile. Characters should do some introspective things. For myself, I keep that part small.
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I also remember Melvin Mole form MAD magazine in 1954. After escaping from jail several times he was stripped of anything he could use to dig and thrown in a dungeon. He still attempted a break using one of his nasal hairs. (he made it) Good post. I’m up there with having every character do something that the reader would find interesting.
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Wow! That’s a serious nose hair.
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Small little hair.
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I loved this post! Great advice. I’ve read books where a lot is happening all over the place, and it’s all interesting, but I still want the protagonist to at least TRY. Try was the perfect word. I retweeted this and put it on my author Facebook page.
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Thank you. Shares mean a lot to us. Trying is the important part. It probably shouldn’t succeed in the early part of a story.
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Reblogged this on Entertaining Stories and commented:
I’ve neglected Entertaining Stories for a few days. I have the post over at Story Empire today. Visit me over there. Our topic today is passive characters.
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I prefer action to the passive. Before I would finish a book no matter what, simply because I had to know the ending. Now, if the plot is dull, passive as you noted, I move on. There needs to be something to keep us interested. Yes, there can be a passive character, but not the main character. If you cannot keep the reader interested, they do move on.
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Some of the passive ones can be really interesting, but they’re supporting characters. Main characters have to drive the story.
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I think it depends on the level of passivity. For example, a story about a character hiding from enemies because they’re too scared to fight could work. Harrowing chase scenes and tense ‘nearly found’ events can bring tension. Not every story needs to have a head-to-head conflict, which is odd for me to say because I always build up to those. There has to be something to replace the aggression and create tension, so this is where atmosphere can come in and allow for a less ‘action star’ protagonist.
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This isn’t about fight scenes. Think about the high school wallflower. She develops a crush. When she gets a new hairdo and buys a red lipstick she’s actively trying to go for the prize. Even chase scenes involve someone trying to escape.
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Okay. The way you wrote things made me think you were talking about that stuff in general. Aggression is different than being proactive to me, so I didn’t get the full gist.
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Proactive, perfect word for what I’m discussing.
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Yeah. That term feels a little less combat oriented than aggression to me.
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Reblogged this on Author Don Massenzio and commented:
Check out this great post from C.S. Boyack via the Story Empire Blog on the topic of passive characters and breaking stuff.
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Thank you, Don.
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You’re welcome.
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This makes sense, Craig. We relate well to characters that struggle in their lives as we do.
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Or even the ones who take it a step further than we would.
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Great post. I have DNF books when the protag is too passive. Yes, I’d enjoy more posts like this.:-)
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Great to know. Thank you.
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If I picked up a book with the MC being that passive throughout, I’d soon put it down. It would drive me nuts. I need the characters to be driven and active. Thanks for a great post, Craig. Like Anita and Jaye, I love how your brain works 🙂
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Thanks, Harmony. If I can come up with a few more ideas I’ll trot them out.
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Always interested in how your brain works, Craig. Go ahead and smash as many of those ‘pearls of wisdom’ that you can lay a hammer on!
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I’ll run out another one as it occurs to me. Appreciate your comments and the reblog.
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